Saturday, June 16, 2012

Sweet Saturday Sample

Welcome back for this Saturday's sweet sample. I am pulling from Duty again this week. Written in first person from Brielle's perspective as she deals with the aftermath of a political marriage. Since it is the first draft, everything is subject to change.

Setting: Brielle's life becomes more complicated by the minute. As she grows uncomfortable, she realizes she needs to be prepared for the worse.



I slipped through the arch to the practice yard, preoccupied with the change. The yard was also abandoned. However, I expected it. The guards were drilling down in a meadow outside the town walls. Only some of Rathenridge’s men and the few those Tomas left behind could possibly be about. Most of them preferred to train in the early morning hours. The shadow on the sundial in the bailey had marked at least midmorning.

I crossed to the armory at a trot, pulling the key ring Horacian gave me from my pocket as I approached the door. But, I didn’t need it. I stumbled to a halt. The door stood ajar. Surely this wasn’t normal.

“Hello, my lady.”

I turned sharply to the right and blinked at the shadows there. He didn’t move, but I could make out his position by the deepening of the shadows from my position in the full sunlight. Beyond that I had to guess.

“Why is the armory door unlocked? Shouldn’t it be locked when no one is around?”

“I am here.”

He moved along the wall toward the door and closer to me. The hair on my arms prickled.

“I was under the impression it was kept locked.”

I couldn’t see his eyes, but the outline of his head seemed to indicate he was looking at me. If the feeling in my gut was accurate, he undressed me with his eyes.


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Creations by Laurel-Rain Snow said...

This sample hints at so much...I'm not sure what will happen, but there is a sense of foreboding....

Thanks for sharing...and here's MY SWEET SATURDAY SAMPLE

Sandra said...

When the hair on someone's arms "prickles", the reader knows excitement and drama are just around the corner!

Sandy Nachlinger said...

I'm curious about why she wants to get into the armory. Does she need a weapon? Is she going there to hide? I like the fact that she can't quite see the man in the shadows -- that increases the tension, especially since he's sending out sexy vibes!

Lindsay said...

Lots of great hints in the scene of things, good and bad, to come