Saturday, July 14, 2012

Sweet Saturday Sample


Welcome! This week's sample is from my current work in process, Duty. Much earlier in the story, this is my heroine and hero's second kiss. It is written in first person from Brielle's point of view.

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After the fealty swearing ceremony, I wanted to sleep. The exhaustion of earlier pulled at my limbs, reminding me of the abuse of the past days. Yet, the troubadour continued to sing of a woman with flame-touched hair. The hero of the tale set off on a foolish quest to win her love by bringing her water from the fountain of youth. I held a small smile on my lips despite the vanity of the lady and the foolishness of her swain. Irvaine was wise enough to know that love cannot be bought with gifts.

“Your smile is slipping.” Irvaine’s hand closed over mine as it lay on the table. “Are you ready to retire?”

I nodded. “I am not accustomed to sleeping on the ground.”

“No ground for you tonight, my love. Tonight there will be a well-stuffed mattress, soft bedding, and me to keep you warm.”

I looked up in surprise to spot Rolendis walking behind him. She passed close enough to hear his words. Irvaine’s free hand brushed beneath my chin, setting my skin on fire as it tilted my face. His thumb grazed the corner of my mouth.

 “I wanted to do this all evening.”

His mouth caught mine gently, exploring and savoring. My senses whirled. Catching his forearm, I tried to anchor myself to reality. Instead, the movement of his lips and the delicate pressure of his fingertips against my cheek pulled me into a world of his creating. I fell beneath their spell.

Only when he withdrew a hand’s breadth to study my face, did reality gradually reassert itself.

“I should have tried that sooner.” His dark eyes studied my face, lingering on my mouth before returning to gaze deep into my eyes. That was when I realized the murmur of conversations around us had died down. I glanced out at the hall. The troubadour finally finished. Most of the crowd’s attention focused on us. I didn’t dare look Rolendis’ way.

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I hope you enjoyed it. :)

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6 comments:

Sandy Nachlinger said...

I love that Irvaine is so attuned to Brielle and aware of her fatigue. And I'm really curious about Rolendis. Seems like she's going to cause some trouble. You've piqued my curiosity.
Good excerpt!

Lindsay said...

This is a wonderful scene with just a subtle hint of tension

Sandra said...

Loved this! Brielle continues to intrigue me.

Casey said...

Seems that Irvaine's provided the better entertainment this evening. I am imagining Brielle's physical and emotional reactions, which is far better than you telling us what they are!

--Kimberly K. Comeau

trojanwalls said...

Hey, Rachel. Thanks for putting up another snippet.
There was something I've been meaning to ask you. I read reviews from sites like Dear Author a lot and it occurred to me that your books are exactly up their alley. Have you considered submitting one for review by them? They don't do it for money and they are very honest about their opinions. If they really like something they'll automatically promote it.
Also, you could submit your books to netgalley, though I don't know what their policies towards self published authors are.
Just a suggestion. I like your work, they might too and reviews always help spread the word.

Rachel Rossano said...

Yes, Sandy, Rolendis is definitely out to cause trouble. ;)

Lindsay, thank you.

Sandra, I am so glad she has caught your attention. :)

Thank you, Kimberly. I try to show more than tell. It is great to hear I am accomplishing it. :)

Thank you, Torjanwalls, I will definitely pursue those leads. I really appreciate it. :)